After Reading cloud 9, Endgame, and Act with out Words i decided to write a play in the styles of Beckett, Brecht and Churchill (Caryl)With only having 3 minutes to present on Monday i wanted everyone to have a chance to read it first or after. I would love some feedback on it.

5x10
By William Salmons
A play of Love, Loss and murder in 2 acts.
The set is a line of 5x10 storage units. Both acts use the same Unit #1606. The units need to be functional as you need to be able to store stuff in them.
There should be at least three units numbered 1605, 1606, and 1607. More is ok, simple is best.
A married couple is placing baby Clothes/furniture into a storage unit.
Take as long as needed to unload the truck and feel the pauses.
Aeron-30’s, any race or size
Chloe 30’s, any race or size.
The entrance of Aeron and Chloe is heard. You hear the sound of a truck backing in from SL. Chloe is seen backing in directing the truck. She is lit by the trucks backup lights.
Chloe- Left, left!
Aeron- (off stage) Who’s left?
Chloe- Mine. LEFT! Stop! STOP!
We hear truck turn off and a door slam. Aeron enters.
Aeron- What? Why did you stop me?
Chloe- You were about to back into that arch.
Aeron- What the…? (pause) Who the hell puts an arch right there? Idiots!
Chloe- I told you we needed a smaller truck.
Aeron- this size is just fine. The bed wouldn’t have fit in the smaller truck. It’s the god dam arch that’s the problem.
Chloe- it’s never your problem.
Aeron- What?
Chloe- Nothing.
Aeron- Problem?
Chloe- No.
Aeron- Sure?
Chloe- Just talking to myself. Let’s get this done It’s getting late and I am hungry.
Aeron- Whose fault is that?
Chloe- what are you talking about?
Aeron- you said you were hungry. I told you to eat before we left.
Chloe- I wasn’t hungry then.
Aeron- I told you it would be a good distance.
Chloe- I didn’t realize you got a unit an hour away from the house. (pause) A good distance (pause) a good distance? What the hell does that mean? Why couldn’t you just have said it was an hour away?
Aeron- I did. I said it was a good distance. (pause) I didn’t say it was up the road.
Chloe- never mind. Forget it.
Aeron- fine.
Chloe- fine. (pause)
Aeron- fine, I wasn’t the one who brought it up.
(Pause)
They begin to unload the truck. They are unloading a Child's room. Crib, toys, clothes. There is no speaking just a few trips back and forth from the truck to the unit. After many boxes have piled up you begin to see Chloe slow down and look at things. Aeron has noticed, but cannot bring himself to say anything to her. Chloe stops and opens the top box. She has pulled out a small article of clothing. She stares at it then bringing it to her face to smell it. Aeron has stopped moving stuff and has moved to watch her.
Aeron- you promised.
Chloe- I promise a lot of things. (pause) I just can’t let it go.
Aeron- do you want to take a break? I’ll find us some coffee or something. You still hungry? You want some coffee?
Chloe- No.
Aeron- No?
Chloe- No.
Aeron- No what? No Coffee? No you’re not hungry?
Chloe- No to everything. Just leave me alone.
(Pause, he goes back to packing, she stares at him.)
Aeron- What?
Chloe- Nothing
Aeron- don’t forget, this was your idea.
Chloe- what the hell are you talking about? You found this place. I wanted to burn it all.
Aeron- Of course that would have solved everything. (pause) I’m gonna keep going. We have a lot more stuff than I realized.
He goes back to unloading the truck; she is now opening another box looking for something. He is annoyed. She continues opening boxes and he continues emptying the truck when he finally has had enough.
Aeron- Chloe that’s enough. Stop it!
Chloe- Where is it?
Aeron- Where is what?
Chloe- (opening boxes) Aeron, I can’t find it! (pause) Where is it? (pause) I thought it was with the clothes. (pause) I don’t see it in here. I can’t believe I lost it.
Aeron- Chloe. Chloe, Stop!
She is now frantic looking for something, tearing all of the boxes open. He has to wrestle her away from them to calm her.
Aeron- Jesus Christ Chloe stop it! Stop! Stop! Stop!
Aeron has Chloe from behind, she has completely lost it. He is whispering in her ear. She slowly begins to gain control.
Aeron- What are you looking for?
Chloe- The purple barrette. You know, the one we got from the France.
She goes back to looking in the boxes.
Chloe- It’s the one with the big flower on top. (pause) I can’t find it. (pause) I want to keep it.
Aeron- Chloe, don’t you remember? (pause) It’s gone, it went into the coffin. (pause) You said it would look pretty.
Chloe- We did? (Pause) I said that? (pause) My god, I forgot that. (Pause) How could I forget that? (Pause)
She stops going through the boxes.
Chloe- How could I forget such a thing? Why am I forgetting this stuff? (pause) What kind of mother was I?
Aeron- It’s a horrible trauma to suffer a loss of like this. It will be a while before you feel normal again.
Chloe- normal? NORMAL? You think what we are doing is normal?
Aeron- that is not what I said. (pause) Maybe we should just stop here and I’ll come back tomorrow by myself. (pause) You wanna do that? (pause) Stop here and go home? (pause) We have plenty of time to finish this.
Chloe- yes, that sounds like a good idea. (pause) I guess I wasn’t ready. Do you mind if I wait in the truck?
Aeron- of course not, go rest. I’ll just be a few more minutes.
She goes back to truck. He watches her go and takes a moment to look around. Takes a deep breath and goes to the boxes and starts to clean them up. He is able to get all of the boxes on the ground into the unit by the time she comes back wearing a jacket.
Aeron- what are you doing?
Chloe- I was lonely... and chilly.
Aeron- I’m sorry, come here. (pause) I wish there was a better way. I wish I could just wiggle my nose and it could be fixed.
Chloe- Like bewitched?
Aeron- yeah.
Chloe- I don’t think I could deal with you wiggling your nose all the time. I wouldn’t be able to tell when you were doing magic or smelling something terrible. (pause)
Aeron- feeling better?
Chloe- yes, I am. Thanks.
Aeron- well good. Go back to the truck I’m almost finished here. Just need to lock up.
Chloe- Wait… (Pause) we’re all ready here, let’s just finish this tonight!
Aeron- you wanna finish? Are you sure? (pause) I can come back tomorrow.
Chloe- I’m fine, Let’s just do this.
Aeron- good. I really didn’t want to come back here. I want to be out of state by the weekend.
Chloe- Jerk.
Aeron- help me with the crib?
Chloe- Sure.
They walk off stage to get the crib. They continue back and forth till the entire crib is placed in the unit.
Chloe- ha.
Aeron- what’s so funny?
Chloe- nothing, I was just thinking of something.
They continue to work. Chloe giggles periodically. They have brought in a Rocking chair, and a shelf or two. Aeron finally gives in to her giggles.
Aeron- what the hell is so funny?
Chloe- nothing.
Aeron- Nothing is pretty fucking funny?
Chloe- you promise you won’t get mad?
Aeron- (pause) I promise.
Chloe- (pause) you’re a cheap bastard.
Aeron- What? (pause) That’s what’s so funny?
Chloe- no not exactly, I was just thinking about this place. (pause) With all of the money we have now, you couldn’t have spent a few more nickels on a better unit? (pause) First off, who the hell puts an arch right there where you can’t get near the units and second, it smells like piss around.
Aeron- (pause) you’re right, it does smell like piss. Oh, well, too late now.
They continue to unload the truck. A changing table and other large misc. stuff have been put outside the truck.
Aeron- Shit! Looks like we need a bigger unit.
Chloe- What if we re-arrange a few things that might help.
Aeron- sounds like a plan.
They begin to pull stuff out of the unit to make it all fit better. After everything is out, they stand there looking at the empty unit. He begins to hum something.
Chloe- what are you humming?
Aeron- the theme to Tetris.
Chloe- Why?
Aeron- it helps me think faster.
Chloe- Fucking weirdo, I married a fucking weirdo.
Aeron- You married worse than that. (slapping her on the ass) and you love it!
Chloe- you think I do. (pause) and that’s what counts.
They kiss.
Chloe- I am going to find us some coffee.
Aeron- (pause) ok.
Chloe- you going to be all right here, alone?
Aeron- (pause) ah, yeah.
Chloe- Ill just be a minute.
He watches her leave again, shakes his head and turns upstage to the unit. Starts putting stuff in the unit then decides its not going to work. He pulls it out again. He stands there looking upstage scratching his head. He gets an idea. He is in a groove and continues to sing the theme to Tetris. He comments on his own work with lines like “there ya go”, “take that little box” or “thought I forgot about you didn’t you?” Have fun with this, he should act like he is really playing Tetris. Chloe has come back with two bottles of water and finds Aeron’s game playing amusing. She watches till he has everything in the unit. He is jubilant that it all fit.
Aeron- Take that storage unit #1606! I win you lose! Looser! LOOOOOOOSSSER!!!!!!
Chloe- Nice Job! (clapping)
Aeron- AAAAHHHH! Jesus Christ, you scared the living shit out of me!
Chloe- Sorry, Didn’t mean to. I didn’t want to ruin your concentration.
Aeron- Thanks for that. Look I did it. All done.
Chloe- nice job.
They both turn upstage with arms around each other looking at the unit with true accomplishment.
Chloe- Aeron?
Aeron- What?
Chloe- Why was this one so hard?
He walks away.
Aeron- I don’t know Chloe, why was it so hard? (pause).
Chloe- I did everything you said. (pause) I Ignored it. (pause) I didn’t feed it. (pause) I didn’t sing to it. (pause) I don’t think I ever picked it up but once or twice to change it.
Aeron- You touched it!? (pause) You weren’t supposed to do that! (pause) I told you to stay away from it, let the nanny take care of it. The moment you touched it, you involved yourself! (pause) You’re a fucking idiot! Why didn’t you tell me you touched it?
Chloe- I am not a fucking idiot. (pause) I didn’t think it would do any harm. (pause) I was alone one night, the Nanny was late and she had been crying for hours I had to do something for her.
Aeron- it
Chloe- What?
Aeron- it, it! (pause) It is not a she or her, it is a thing, (pause) it’s an it.
Chloe- How can you be so callus?
Aeron- Callus? You have to be callous to do what we do! (pause) You told me you were ok with this.
Chloe- I am.
Aeron- are you? (pause) are you?
Chloe- yes!
She starts to walk away from him. He grabs her.
Aeron- Look at me. (pause) Look AT me!
Chloe- let me go.
Aeron- no.
Chloe- Let me go. I’m fine. (pause) Let me go!
Aeron- NO! You are not fine. (pause) You loved that thing didn’t you? (pause) DIDN’T YOU?
Chloe- (pause) yes…
Aeron- What!?
Chloe- Yes, I loved HER. (pause) And I didn’t bury the purple barrette either.
Aeron- What are you talking about? (pause) I saw it.
Chloe- you saw the pink one. The purple one is right here. (pulls it from jacket pocket) I thought I had packed it.
Aeron- I’m speechless. (pause) I am absolutely speechless. (pause) What do we do now? You’re attached, we won’t be able to move, (pause) change our names, (pause) Oh god! (pause) You’ll wanna visit the fucking grave won’t you? (pause) You’ll want to go every Sunday and blubber over something you were never supposed to love. Do you know what you have done? (pause) Do you realize how You have fucked us?! (pause) You have single handedly screwed us both. We will never be able to do this again. You had the easiest job in the book. (pause) All you had to do was get pregnant and have a child. (pause) How did this happen? (pause)
Chloe- I’m sorry, I didn’t think it would do any harm to hold her.
Aeron- Well you thought wrong. (pause) Never mind, (pause) I’ll figure something out. (pause)
Chloe- Should we finish this?
She turns toward unit
Aeron- Of course.
He walks up behind her and snaps her neck and stuffs her in the unit. It is now full. He closes the door and locks it.
Aeron- Done!